Wednesday, October 18, 2017

Nat'l Day on Writing 2017: Writing Marathon, Section 5 (10:00-11:15)

In honor of the National Day on Writing (October 20, 2017), you participated in a "writing marathon" during class on October 19. The result was a passage of polished writing for you to share with students from another section of College Composition I.

First, write a comment on this blog post in which you share that polished work of writing from the October 19 writing marathon. Before clicking the "Publish Your Comment" button, you will be asked to "Choose an identity."
  • You could sign in with a Google account or an OpenID, if you have one.
  • Or you could click "Name/URL" and enter your name. Your first name would suffice.
  • Please do not click "Anonymous." That would not allow me to know who posted the writing, so I wouldn't be able to give you credit for your work!
This ^ first part (posting your own writing) is due at the end of class on October 19.


Second, visit the blog post that features the writing marathon selections from another section of College Composition I. Click here to go to that blog post and read those students' writing.

From that post, select one student's writing sample that you like. Write a comment on that blog post that does these things:
  1. names the writer upon whose writing you wish to comment;
  2. provides some compliments on that student's writing; and
  3. cites at least one detail from that student's writing and tells what is "good" about that aspect of his or her writing (e.g., "Pat, I especially like your line about the sun's 'burning through the canopy of leaves overhead' because it's such a clear detail. I can clearly visualize the morning sun's rays coming through the leaves of the trees near King Pavilion.").
This ^ second part (commenting on the writing of a student from another class) is due a half-hour before the start of class on October 24.

25 comments:

Landen said...

The outdoor area across from May Hall puts me in an overall good mood. It is a calm, peaceful place on a day that is neither too hot nor too cold. The fresh air and light breeze provide a relaxed and mind-clearing atmosphere. In the distance, you can hear sounds of construction, vehicles, and students. Dickinson is a safe town and the school is in a quiet neighborhood, making it really easy to enjoy time spent outside. I think that we, as students, are lucky to have a place like this on campus.

Karson Backer said...

The first book I spotted after taking a seat in the library was "Revival" by Stephen King. I have read and in fact own this book. Stephen King novels, for those who don't read his work, can get quite vulgar and dark. This book is the epidemy of both those aspects. The book tells the tale of the main character, whom I cannot remember his name at the moment. It goes through his life events, and what had happened to him leading up to this point in his life. Along the way he meets some characters that stick throughout the story. One of them claims to have the device that shows people what actually is waiting for us after our old ticker stops ticking. This is where the darkness starts. Reading the last chapters of this book was so dark that it tested my religion. Stephen King wrote something so powerful that I felt the need to pray after reading. How nuts is that? All together it was an amazing book, and I recommend Stephen King novels in general to anyone who likes to read some crazy stories while they take a break from their light-hearted books.

Marissa Schroeder said...

Being outdoors for class is nice. Having class outdoors is nice because it is a change of pace from the typical classroom and it allows us to learn in a different environment other than the classroom. Today was a perfect day for this activity as it's supposed to get to be 80 degrees this afternoon. The sun is shining very bright and I begin to regret not choosing a table in the shade. If I close my eyes and let the warm sun beat down on my skin, I feel a sense of relaxation. The birds are chirping in the background and suddenly I wish I was at my lake cabin relaxing and about to take a nap on the hammock. It’s nice during this time of year because there have been days where it has been way too cold for the bugs to survive so now I only have a couple bugs bothering me, thankfully no flies. The grass is still green when you look at it from a distance but as you get closer you can see that it is slowly starting to die along with the hundreds of pine needles and leaves. The birds are chirping which is a nice sound to hear in October. The only other noise in the background is the noise from the renovation of Woods Hall. Finally, Woods hall is getting renovated. Woods was closed during my senior year of high school for this renovation that had never taken place. Then, during my freshman year of college they opened Wood’s back up. I stayed in Woods hall during my freshman year and when my mom and I went to move in we found out that they hadn’t cleaned the rooms before they let everyone move in, and cleanliness wasn’t an issue when everybody moved out two years prior. Living in Woods was the best decision that I have made because the amount of friends and memories that I have are incredible. I truly enjoyed myself when staying in Woods hall, our RA and the RD were very fun people and we always had a good time even though the entire hall was only half way filled. Moments like these are why I enjoy living in North Dakota. I can sit in peace and almost quiet in the middle of my campus and just enjoy the environment surrounding me. Another reason why I like living in North Dakota is that we have all 4 seasons.

Anthony said...

As I sat in the library I started to get a bitter sweet feeling. It was mostly a bitter feeling because it made me think of all the things I hate about school. I don't enjoy the work, responsibilities, deadlines, essays, finals, etc. I never enjoyed school and I probably never will. But I think of the payoff that completing school will give me, and I start to get a little bit of that sweet feeling. Going to school is going to teach me so many valuable lessons. It is going to help me reach my goals in life. It is going to help me be successful in life. The one thing that I am going to use the most from college, is work ethic. Going to college is going to teach me good work ethic, and I will use that in all aspects of life after school. Yes, I hate school, but one day I look back and realize that I love what it did for me.

Paris Schaefer said...

National Day of Writing—Stoxen Library

Ah, the library. So much potential knowledge to be attained in one building and yet never enough time to learn it all in one’s life time. It is sad, but due to the number of newly published books and forgotten or lost books, it is hard to attain knowledge once the opportunity is lost. It reminds me of Thomas Jefferson. His books were for the lost in a fire of his first library. Following that, he sold his second library and it became the center of the Library of Congress. To me, the library is a calming place that I have always loved growing up. It was my place where I could escape into the worlds that books had to offer and explore them at my own discretion. I have formed an imagination as wild as ever by reading books such as The Hobbit by J.R.R. Tolkien, Hush, hush by Becca Fitzpatrick, The Shadowhunter Chronicles by Cassandra Clare, and Divergent by Veronica Ross. I, too, hope to create a book one day that others can also enjoy and explore just as I did when I was younger and still do.

Alex Ross said...

"Italian Village"
The Vibrant buildings that reside at the bottom of the hills remind me of many of the Caribbean Islands I have been too. In particular St. Maarten, British Virgin Island, Samana, and Cartagena Columbia. The Houses at the bottom of the hills represent the old heritage that has been there for many generations but has been well maintained in order to preserve history for the islanders and the tourists. As you drive through the towns you smell the vibrant odors that reside around the island. The sea water is always present and after a long enough time of exposure you began to feel "covered" in salt. On the island of St. Maarten you smell the many rum and liquor distilleries that are found all over the islands. The deeper into the back country you go the more culture and realistic island life of the inhabitants. On the coastal tourist spots everything looks pretty and up kept but as soon as you move past this you start to realize the actual living conditions of the islanders. When walking around the downtown touristy areas the streets are lined with cobble stone that is uneven but beautiful. The Canvas quilt of the "Italian Village" reminds me of walking down the uneven streets and staring down looking at the beautiful art that has been created with simplistic materials but provides visual elegance.

Carrie said...

It’s a beautiful little room with many different forms of art inside it. The art that is right in front of me is very colorful. There doesn’t really seem to be a pattern to the particular piece. It is rectangular in shape, but the edges are wavy and not exact. The art piece is actually on a cloth canvas. Blue, red, white and black make up the color schemes on the cloth. These colors look like they were almost spray painted on. It reminds me of spray painting pieces of metal in my dad’s shop. I made flowers out of old tin cans, and then I would spray paint them various colors. There would be a huge card board canvas laying on the ground, and that’s where I would lay the metal flower down. Then I would pick a color and start painting. After I finished painting all the flowers, the cardboard would look like its own unique design. The colors would be over lapped or would leave a splotchy trail, that made it look really cool. The design on the art cloth reminds me of this instance. The red on the cloth isn’t solid and it leaves a splotchy trail, much like spray paint does. The white color also does the same thing as the red. Other than the colors that make up the background there are also three groups of an assortment of red cloth looking cigars that are attached to the cloth canvas. There is a group of these roller things at the top right corner, the middle left, and bottom right. They are all situated in a stair case sequence with five rollers in the top and bottom corners and six rollers in the middle group.

Jameson said...

While sitting in at this table in Stoxen library I get a sense of motivation. The quiet, openness of the library allows my thoughts to flow freely. The dark blue wall in the back catches my attention for all the other walls are white. On that wall are two pictures of Theodore Roosevelt, a president who I have read about numerous times. It's almost as if he is watching us as we strive to better educate ourselves. Stoxen library is a place I could sit all day and never get bored with my thoughts. 

Alexis Bohl said...

The library is one of my favorite places in the whole school. It's so peaceful. I love the weird whirring sound that never really goes away; it makes for perfect background noise. It always feels pleasant and easy in here. There is barely ever any talking, but there is a lot of page turning and shuffling from trying to find the most comfortable spot on those not-so-comfortable wooden chairs that the library has. Everyone in the library is there with the idea of learning being the first thing on their mind, so no one can be bothered to interrupt your study time. No one questions when 15 to 20 kids come barging in and begin furiously writing for 15 minutes and then leave just as suddenly as they came; it's just another normal day. 
Also, the book collection is mind-blowing, I've spent a good hour or so wandering through the psychology section alone. It has around 3 shelves just for the psychology of dreams. It's not hard to see how easy it is to get lost in a place like this. The library is basically my personal heaven. A place of unadulterated learning. 

Jon said...

Sitting outside by the parking lot and trees in front of May Hall on a nice fall day it was sunny with a slight breeze. It may have been a nice fall day but winter will be here soon. Sitting here I observe students walking by and cars passing through every so often. In the distance it sounds like a chainsaw running I imagine someone getting some trees trimmed up and getting their projects done before winter.

Ron Short said...

Ronnie Short
Writing Marathon
I saw a dog outside of our first stop today, it seemed to be a black lab. Wow the art room, makes me think of all those people who are more talented artistically than me. Not that this bothers me because it really doesn’t matter.
The art seems to be made of cloth, and the art is honestly amazing. I do question one of the pieces of art though, it has a cowboy on his horse in what seems to be the desert. What doesn’t make any sense to me is that there is a rainbow in the piece. It really doesn’t rain in the desert and also even if it did there wouldn’t be a rainbow.
Another piece seems to be a Mediterranean village. It is on the coast; it reminds me of a place I would love to visit or vacation.
There seems to be another village piece. This village seems Asian, it has that style of architecture, as well as large mountains behind it. It could be in India actually which is actually a beautiful place. I think the mountain range in the back is based on the one in Nepal. I know it has Everest in it but I can’t think of the name of the mountain range.
A piece next to it is just a single Mountain, it is probably a symbol for solitude. Who knows I guess I would have to ask the artist.
Another picture to the far left of me is one of a family. I think its grandparents with their grandchildren, but maybe not. I mean the older people in the picture have gray hair so that’s why I think they are the kids’ grandparents, but who knows four little kids can be stressful.



Akintunde Ibikunle said...

Overall brown theme, low lights, incredible art works and paintings hanging on the walls all around. Artworks or art galleries are certainly one of the most beautiful creations of man and the Klinefelter Art Gallery is no different.

For me personally, beholding artworks and paintings especially are one of the best ways to relieve stress. It takes your mind off every worry and allows you to appreciate the beauty of life while forgetting the ugly just for a moment. And for people like me who do not do yoga, visiting an art gallery certainly can be a good alternative for detoxifying the mind.

Here I am in the beautiful Klinefelter Art Gallery and as expected, it is all round beauty. One of my favorite paintings in this gallery would be the one hanging on the wall right ahead of where I am sitting; a big art painting of what appears to be a bamboo farm. The bamboo tree on its own is a source of inspiration as it is the fastest growing tree within a short period of time, though the seed might have been planted for a long time; months, maybe years. The bamboo plantation painting is flanked to the left by what I’ll call a yellow rose farm as there are lots of beautiful yellow roses in the painting. Similarly, on the right side of the bamboo farm painting is another gorgeous rose farm with a blue and lilac theme; how beautiful.

All over the walls are different beautiful abstract paintings of different kinds as well as paintings of nature. The only thing missing here would be slow paced music or instrumentals and I could sit here all day long if given the chance. If there were anything I wished I was but not, it will be an artist.

Rupa Sharma said...

Rupa Sharma
Art Gallery
As we enter in the art gallery which is located in DSU. This is my 1st experience of visiting art gallery so I was excited. The room was silence and different kinds of art are posted in the wall. Firstly, I observe all art, I see the name belongs to art and I read them all because each art has their own story. Every art has its own beauty and effort so I can say it’s my got golden chance to observe it. literally, I missed my art class. I took my art class when I was in 1st semester. My art class was pretty cool and professor was so good towards me. I did lots of painting and I got chance to know about the art history.
I my personal view, art is the feelings of the people and painting is the way to present the felling through art. I love way of decoration of the room whereas, the room was so attractive, at the ceiling there is lots of light which give sparking light to painting. I feel emotion with one art in where it shows the family’s love. The topic of art is the walk. I observe that art for a while. I missed my grandparents back to home and their love. Therefore, I enjoy the art gallery and the environment of the room it was so calming

Ingrid Niyimbona said...

Rupa Sharma,I like the details in your writing because I got the same feelings when I visited that room, the environment was so peaceful. In this sentence" I love way of decoration of the room whereas, the room was so attractive, at the ceiling there is lots of light which give sparking light to painting.", I like the description you did because the decoration was amazing.

Mary Joy Limpot said...

Akintunde, judging by the first paragraph “Overall brown theme, low lights, incredible artworks, and paintings hanging on the walls all around. Artworks or art galleries are certainly one of the most beautiful creations of man, and the Klinefelter Art Gallery is no different” I knew this would be a good text and it is. I also agree that going to an art gallery would be a great option to clear one’s mind. An art gallery is quiet and peaceful, and there are different kinds of arts displayed that one could take some time to appreciate.

Matt said...

Jon, I liked the compare and contrast you have with the present and future. That even though it was " nice fall day but winter will be here soon." The idea that even though you are sitting down, time(the people) is sill moving. That people still have things to do before the nice fall days are gone.

Melissa said...

Landen, I liked how you said "the fresh air and light breeze provide a relaxed and mind-clearing atmosphere." That's how I felt when I was sitting outside too. Reading what you wrote makes me feel as if I am back sitting on a bench outside. The details make it seem like the reader is there as well.

McKenna said...

I was gone for this assignment, but I had the opportunity to write about what I experienced as a youth leader at the North Dakota Youth Convention.
"I feel here that tonight many students here are suffering. Whether it be from depression, sickness or pain that you cannot even explain. How many of you students here are feeling that way tonight?" Said Pastor Kevin. As I look up, I instantly feel heartbroken. Many students of North Dakota rose their hand to signify that they are suffering. That they are broken. "If you rose your hand, come up to the altar. Leave it here all tonight. Cry out to God. Cry out to God just like you would in your bedroom. Use this altar as a time to scream out your prayer." As a youth leader, I instantly feel goosebumps as the students cry out. "I need you God!" Cried out one girl. I raise my left hand and extend it out towards the broken students. I pray a fiery prayer. A prayer that is so desperate for the students to be broken from their chains. "I NEED YOU GOD." Screamed out a boy. As I continue praying, I feel the anointing of the Holy Spirit. The feeling is so strong that my pulse starts racing and my breath starts to quicken. The worship music is getting louder. "Start a fire down in my soul, that I can't contain, that I can't control.." and the students all around me are extending their hands out to God. Reaching out their sinful hands in humility, hoping to experience a revelation of God's goodness. I feel peace all around me. I hear the invisible chains hitting the floor as students become free from their sin.

Hardika said...

Marissa, I really like how you described what you feel. When I read your text I can actually visualize what might be going on. I agree on your second last line 'I can sit in peace and almost quiet in the middle of my campus and just enjoy the environment surrounding me.' This is exactly why I like North Dakota too.

Julian Knight said...

Alexis I like how you were describing the library."shuffling from trying to find the most comfortable spot on those not-so-comfortable wooden chairs that the library has." I absolutely love how you described that because I feel like everyone has had that moment in those chairs. You described the books in the library very well too, it seems truly like a haven for psych majors such as yourself.

Bailey Smith said...

Mckennna, Wow this is so inspiring. The way you described the youth convention was good and I could imagine being there with you. That is so awesome that you could feel the presence of the Holy Spirit there in the room. You did a great job of describing something that is hard to describe.

Bryce VaughAn said...

Jameson, I enjoyed the simple yet thoughtful meaning of your paragraph. I share many of the same feelings as you do when it comes to thought provoking. I could also sit there for long periods of time. Thank you for your experience. Very insightful

Austin Kadrmas said...

Alexis, I really enjoyed reading about your experience visiting the library. The sound of pages turning is one of my favorite things to hear when I visit the library. I think that we can all agree that everyone in the library is in the "learning zone" and set in deep thought. I appreciated how you described the uncomfortable wooden chairs.

Jasmine Northrop said...

Mckenna, as I was reading this I got goosebumps everywhere. This is such a powerful and heartfelt passage. I'm so glad you got to experience this, it's truly amazing. I love at the end when you said 'I hear the invisible chains hitting the floor as students become free from their sin." It really gives a great image of what was happening there and the way the students and you felt.

Rachel Andrus said...

Alex Ross,

I love the way you took artwork that reminded you of a place that had meaning to you and described that place. It's really awesome and descriptive. You paint a beautiful picture, and it makes me want to go to Italy!